Thursday, April 1, 2010
journal 2
"The camera never lies” What do you think the saying? Someone is favor in but someone is opposed to.Camera is one of the important inventions in the world. In this modern time, people have already created a fantastic thing. There are a lot of advantages. It can remain the image of the view; thus, we can memorize the photo which is fun time or worse time in every time. In an addition, Photo exists a astonish function. It can be changed by modifying; thus, people usually modify the disadvantages of the pictures can make us feel funny or confident; however, someone is cheated by the modified photos. We can not believe the background of the image because it can be compounded by people. We can use some software to revise the background. In my opinion, I still believe that photo is the great invention. After all, it has more advantages than disadvantages.
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Hi Ian,
ReplyDelete你有些不錯的ideas, 可惜礙於怪怪的文法，整篇讀起來有些不順。Please revise the following mistakes found in your journal. Thanks.
1. 第一行:What do you think (少了什麼) the saying?
2. double check 這一句的grammar或spelling: Someone is favor in but someone is opposed to
3. In this modern time, people have already created a fantastic thing. 這一句少了些字，因為你沒寫出來，所以這句話變成沒有follow unity。
4. thus, we can memorize the photo which is fun time or worse time in every time. 這一句的形容詞子句有問題
5. In an addition, Photo exists a astonish function. 首先請把an拿掉，再者 exist??? why did you use exist here? 最後有看出 a astonish function有什麼問題嗎?
6.thus, people usually modify the disadvantages of the pictures can make us feel funny or confident 檢查主詞、動詞
7. however, someone is cheated by the modified photos. 不順，因為用字不對，不是用someone
8. In my opinion, I still believe that photo is the great invention. After all, it has more advantages than disadvantages. 針對你的ending, 我只能說它會讓整篇的分數降低一些...it is not a good ending. Try a new one.